Progenitors and Progeny Part 2 (Comic)

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Progenitors and Progeny Part 2 (Comic)

Post by The Liar » Sat Jun 23, 2018 8:29 am

http://www.fembotwiki.com/index.php?tit ... eny#Part_2

I'm wondering if the sex (related) scene is too long, tedious and disrupting pacing.

Is the fan-service desired or would more brevity be preferred?
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Re: Progenitors and Progeny Part 2 (Comic)

Post by zerodin » Sat Jun 23, 2018 11:32 am

The Liar wrote:http://www.fembotwiki.com/index.php?tit ... eny#Part_2

I'm wondering if the sex (related) scene is too long, tedious and disrupting pacing.

Is the fan-service desired or would more brevity be preferred?
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Re: Progenitors and Progeny Part 2 (Comic)

Post by liliwinnt6 » Wed Jun 27, 2018 5:28 pm

sorry, mistype
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