Very Brief "Story"

Brueckmann · Post by **Brueckmann** » Sat Jul 03, 2004 9:58 pm

4 July 2004

First off, this is totally fictional. Not to worry; I am still alive (or else I wouldn’t be typing this!). I’ve had the idea of writing something in this vein for a long, long time. What you see here represents a preliminary version of something I hope one day to expand. Still, I thought I’d slap this little bit together, in case anybody wants to see what I’m up to.
I just thought I’d spill some electronic ink.

-Heinrich Brueckmann

Open and Shut Case

I can guess at the circumstances under which this letter is first being read. This bedroom was the most appropriate setting for the concluding moments of the tragedy. It was the journey and, inescapably, the destination. By the time this page is being analyzed, the bedroom is likely to be cordoned off by police tape, indicating that it is now considered a crime scene. I have long recognized it as such.
You have noticed that this page has been laminated. Given the circumstances in which it has been found, the reason should be obvious. I wanted it to be protected so that it could be read. Possibly even understood.
Let me tell you something of the circumstances that have driven me to this. I had a life and family; to me the words once meant the same thing.
But anon I had allowed myself to become so thoroughly deluded that I willingly — indeed with joy — cast off my personal attachments small and large. That I wanted to be rid of my human responsibilities — I cannot deny. My relationship with my wife was complex and deep. I shed it with relief — despite her snarls and tears — and imagined a life with my new love free of entanglements. Imagined freedom from the need to compromise. Imagined freedom from unfair expectations. Imagined devotion.
Things could have been different, and that tortures me. But I
had not the imagination for that. Instead, I purchased — I choose the word ‘purchase’ carefully - falsehood at the price of truth. I was drawn to the idea of a world of fixed standards and no doubts. Solidity, reliability, constancy, eternally.
But she was nothing but the personification of lies.
The lies I told myself.
The one I felt love for could not love me back.
Can a man die of solitude in the presence of perfection?
Could there be any other outcome?
Purity, perfection, and perjury. It is irreconcilable. That the object of my affection — I choose the word ‘object’ carefully — cannot reciprocate my emotion is what has driven me to create the scene you see. And yet how many relationships out there between two people are also so one-sided?
My actions have framed perfect selfishness.
I know I am beyond forgiveness.
She lacked the capacity to transgress, to sin. But I missed the natural corollary: the capacity to forgive.
I have decided to remove my clothing before shooting myself, as a symbol of my naked honesty and frankness. I wish to symbolize humanity, stripped of all of constructs, all pieces of technology. Except for the gun. It tempts me the same way that she did. It’s not what really killed me; it was her — it.
Metal touching my lips.

***

It’s not the first time.

htb21 · Post by **htb21** » Sat Jul 03, 2004 11:52 pm

wow... well written. Very Deep and dark, i would say it should be quite an intrigueing read when its complete.

rs5420 · Post by **rs5420** » Sun Jul 04, 2004 4:04 am

Well, you have the story plot that "kills" - i choose the the word "kill" carefully...

kb7rky · Post by **kb7rky** » Sun Jul 04, 2004 7:46 pm

The phrase "holy flaming hell" comes to mind...

...along with "Damn nice story!"

Very well written...and short (I choose the word "short" very carefully

)

(you realize you'll never live that down, HB...and I choose the word "live" very carefully

)

Doug

ps I wanna be interviewed next!

Mirage · Post by **Mirage** » Mon Jul 05, 2004 4:37 am

Hey! It's good to see I am not the only sicko here that writes about death and other bad things! (L)

Good stuff!

Just one question... Did the character discovered that the gynoid had a "p" instead of a "V" only after making wild passionated love to it?

I would shoot my brains too...

Mirage

rs5420 · Post by **rs5420** » Mon Jul 05, 2004 6:16 am

+1 Mirage!

That will certainly be a good reason for a refund, ans maybe lawsuits!

tectile · Post by **tectile** » Mon Jul 05, 2004 6:20 am

When ever I see the name "Heinrich Brueckmann" on a story, I know I'm in for something good. What more can I say?

fection · Post by **fection** » Tue Jul 06, 2004 1:02 am

Nice one!
I liked the 'writing in this vein' pun, too. Having the note described as laminated was a nasty touch (I hope you ARE doing OK.......).
Very vividly written, again.
fection.

Brueckmann · Post by **Brueckmann** » Wed Jul 14, 2004 8:14 pm

This is just a note of thanks to everyone who read that little tidbit and relied: Thanks. Your attentions have not escaped my own.