Housewife repairs
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Re: Housewife repairs
Interesting! But if I were the husband, I wouldn't be griping when I find a free fembot in my house!
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Re: Housewife repairs
Protesting sleeper housewife & repair fembot?Kishin wrote:It's an old trope and one that's not too far outside the sort of things the companies normally produce, so I figured it would be an easy idea.
That's one of the essential, greatest tropes in all of ASFR!
It's the equivalent in norm-porn of a visit from the cable or pool guy.
...and yet...
What you have described lacks a kind of secondary engine. Your story does flow well, and makes sense - but I think the viewers could be more gripped if you examine:
What these would add up to is not a deep subtext, but a rationale under-girding the scene - even if it's a very ill-defined rationale, the specificity of the hints will align to imply, "What you are watching is a true reflection of the way things typically unfold between women in this world." The engine propels the undermining of the repairbot's original intention to routinely repair then move on to the next house.- what circumstances triggered the housewife's equipment failure, and the nature of that failed code or component?
- why/how the repairwoman allows herself to be drawn into sex on the job (or if that's okay, why go ahead with sex which will damage her?)
- what one particular injection of costume or trait could each character be given?
The engine can (vaguely) be about the nature of their beauty, their sexual appetites, the power relationship between them, or outside requirements from the husband, the company or the government. The engine can be a whole big thing with details, or like here where you justifiably want to keep it simple.
Simple = one rule for each, plus each ignores the other's quirk.
I'm not making a plea for big exposition or lines of dialogue to memorize, but there's a value to even a very small bit of "business" for the actresses to embody and for the viewer to read. Bonus points if you can figure out any sort of justification to bind a few engine bits together in a theme - the lure of sin, any random bet, routine solar flares, ....Perhaps the housewife wears a mix of inappropriate/confused clothes (without noticing),
while the repairbot treats her like she's an adorable pet
(without the wife reacting particularly to this condescending/adoring attitude, just that she's pissed like she's a housewife dealing with an unsatisfactory customer relationship with the car mechanic).
We don't want too many generic-seeming movies. So that's my plea for at least a splash of color/flavor; my plea for much, much less than a coherent, detailed backstory.
- Dale Coba























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