Feedback and You!

[gynoneko]

Thank you! Brilliant. Feedback is ALWAYS a plus, even if it is just "That was Awesome!". Although, constructive feedback is still better. I'd rather get "I loved how you handled the scene where Ellie and Matrix face off" or even "I was confused why you had Danny yell at Jennifer like that". These are always more constructive. I admit, I check the read numbers on my stories every day, and I love getting replies!
If my stories get no replies, you can believe I will not keep writing it, or will end it sooner rather than later.
Positivity goes a long way!

[Spaz]

I must say this post made me more comfortable to post stories I've been sitting on for years.

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[apok]

+1
Give feedback properly or don't give it at all.
I've been fortunate to receive very helpful constructive feedback with my story posts, and anyone else deserves the same respect and advice.

[Mirage]

THIS IS THE MOST STUPID SHIT I EVER READ IN ALL MY YEARS HERE!





(L)..' You know me how I feel about posting.

Being honest, I myself don't have the time many time to read big stories, so, I always read the short ones first. Long series, Sadly, I don't have the time for them. I Am sure they are very good too. Sorry about this.
MIRAGE

[daphne]

Next story submission: all fruit fellating and kitten spanking.

[australopith]

Prop and I would love some more feedback on our Contessa story, especially now that it's done. Is the current tone of this thread scaring possible feedback providers away? Don't worry–you needn't risk offending us.

[--NightBattery--]

i read the two first chapters.
she reminds me of vampirella, but since i didn't read the original submit i don't know how she looks n_nU
she probably doesn't look like vampirella at all.
the setting is cool.

I would like to finish reading it, but i am also on something right now, so i don't have all the time i wish.
Also i feel any appreciation i might comment is meaningless in comparison others have given since i'm just a neighbour from the image board.
right now i feel i am not even the right person to give comment.
i feel authors get tired of simple feed backs like "nice", "i like it", "fap to that" and at the same time might get the sensation of over flattery, and i wouldn't like any one to believe that.

should we feel encouraged to say anything despite not being meaningful to help authors?
because i like a lot of stories but i never have anything insightful to add!

i wish we had something like a like button, fake internet points or something, not like the poll, something more secretive, reliable and that wouldn't hurt the authors by getting few, of course there are the views, but isn't there something hide here in the code that could help?

oh, by the way, you did the boom boom wasabi thing right?
that was great!
i loved it a lot, the characters, their personalities, the dominant yet unreliable robot boss woman, oh yes, i want to see her cause trouble, malfunction and see the jew guy (he is jew in my mind) trying to escape imposible mafia odds with no one finding boom boom is just a robot...i wouldn't like you to feel obliged to make a new chapter of it and also the same time i wouldn't like to feel obliged to read it and promote it. but if a new one suddenly appear i would probably silently enjoy it
hmmm..

any way, forgive me for not being the feed you deserve

[australopith]

i read the two first chapters [of "Contessa: Vampire Hunter"].

Please do read the rest when you have the time... Propman and I think you'll enjoy it!

[Contessa] reminds me of vampirella, but since i didn't read the original submit i don't know how she looks n_nU

The earlier Contessa stories are:
- Mysteries of the Castle!
- Castle Mysteries: Coup De Grace

Prop and I think Contessa Isabella probably looks an awful lot like Barbara Carrera:



But I can imagine Contessa dressing like Vampirella to battle the vampires. "How perfectly cunning–fooling them by costuming as one of their own... and darling, that ensemble! Greg, Calvin... order it for me! Chop-chop!"

Also i feel any appreciation i might comment is meaningless in comparison others have given since i'm just a neighbour from the image board.
right now i feel i am not even the right person to give comment.
i feel authors get tired of simple feed backs like "nice", "i like it", "fap to that" and at the same time might get the sensation of over flattery, and i wouldn't like any one to believe that.

Just telling us some things you liked and didn't like is good enough–really! (-:

oh, by the way, you did the boom boom wasabi thing right?
that was great!

Yes, and glad you liked it! "Wasabi" was my follow-up to Propman's original, awesome "Boom-Boom Bots" in which you can learn how Boom-Boom first assembled her little gang. "Wasabi" is actually set midway through Prop's original story.

the dominant yet unreliable robot boss woman, oh yes, i want to see her cause trouble, malfunction and see the jew guy (he is jew in my mind) trying to escape imposible mafia odds with no one finding boom boom is just a robot...i wouldn't like you to feel obliged to make a new chapter of it and also the same time i wouldn't like to feel obliged to read it and promote it. but if a new one suddenly appear i would probably silently enjoy it

I'm a Jew, but I didn't consider whether Chad was! I'll have to ask him–if Boom-Boom will let me! (-:

New adventures of Boom-Boom will definitely appear–Propman and I are working on some now! You can even read this teaser by Prop, in which he tells how he recently "met" Boom-Boom again, and she told him about some of her adventures to come.

any way, forgive me for not being the feed you deserve

Actually, your reply was great!

[Propman]

Battery, thanks a lot for your feedback, we really want our readers to comment and criticize. Just telling us what you liked and disliked helps us immensely. I'm not so proud of my older stories, but I've learned a lot from the feedback - which also means that my original stories aren't that great, and we're considering at least a complete rewrite of original Mysteries of the Castle.

We want the stories to kinda stand on their own, so we're drifting away from gratuitous fap-bait

But we'll still have some sexy moments–and malfunctions will happen, especially with lusty and self-destructive Contessa and unpredictable, violent Boom-Boom.

Boom-Boom: "Shoot, Prop–I can predict me! An' too much time around Wormwood has made me just a little less violent lately–except maybe to her. Gotta keep things cool, fool... you'll see how we do."

[australopith]

Boom-Boom: "Shoot, Prop–I can predict me! An' too much time around Wormwood has made me just a little less violent lately–except maybe to her. Gotta keep things cool, fool... you'll see how we do."

Why am I still kind of uneasy?

[Brytestar]

I'm not sure if this feedback thread is still being used. I was hoping for more stories for bedtime reading. (No not scary ones. Yes, Halloween is a day away I get it!)

Now before you say "write your own stories Brytestar!" IF I had time to do it I would. But I don't right now.

I would like you see stories about muscular gynoids (blond) that would give DC heroes like Galatea, Wonder Woman, Power Girl and Supergirl a run for their money. So is anyone up for that?

[darkbutflashy]

I would like you see stories about muscular gynoids (blond) that would give DC heroes like Galatea, Wonder Woman, Power Girl and Supergirl a run for their money. So is anyone up for that?

I'm in favour of powerful fembots/cyborgs, too, but do they absolutely have to be blonde, muscular for you? "Muscular" doesn't give much sense to me when I write about a cyberfemme who just utilizes her hydrolics to slowly push away a tons-heavy obstacle or who is hurling a goon against a wall or who is tightening a bolt with her plain fingers.

About blonde, I always assume powerful+blonde as a kind of disguise. Do you mean it that way? Because it hits my brain a bit when I mix "muscular" into it.

[--NightBattery--]

hey bry, i am not a writter, but if you write me one of those floating texts box-things about a muscular android i would love to draw something for it.

[Brytestar]

Ok Battery I'll attempt to come up with something...

The one clue I can give is the Water Enforcer from the old Hercules Show (With Kevin Sorbo) Got a pic of it somewhere.

[--NightBattery--]

Oh, wow. Ha ha.
I am really going to need direction with that one!
she is something like a golem/elemental thing for what i grasp from the hercules wiki.
Not my type of technology, but it's your call.

[Brytestar]

I'll find the pic of the water enforecr and post that. Stay Tuned.

[--NightBattery--]

Al'right, copy.

[Brytestar]

[Saya]

I would like you see stories about muscular gynoids (blond) that would give DC heroes like Galatea, Wonder Woman, Power Girl and Supergirl a run for their money. So is anyone up for that?

I'm in favour of powerful fembots/cyborgs, too, but do they absolutely have to be blonde, muscular for you? "Muscular" doesn't give much sense to me when I write about a cyberfemme who just utilizes her hydrolics to slowly push away a tons-heavy obstacle or who is hurling a goon against a wall or who is tightening a bolt with her plain fingers.

About blonde, I always assume powerful+blonde as a kind of disguise. Do you mean it that way? Because it hits my brain a bit when I mix "muscular" into it.

A good excuse for the muscular bit, if you wanted to include that, could be something relating to synthetic musculature. Think the stuff on the Crysis nanosuit, only not made out of alien. Or, hell, designer preference. If the robot in question isn't intended to be obviously so, perhaps that's a design decision made to make her less suspicious overall.

[Brytestar]

That's interesting Saya. I'll keep that in mind. I know not everyone is into muscles (and no I am NOT talking about muscle cars/trucks!) Still I'd hope to see a story about it.

[Esleeper]

I've been waiting for feedback on my fics for some time now. There is a link to them in my signature.

[Murotsu]

I've been waiting for feedback on my fics for some time now. There is a link to them in my signature.

I took a quick look at your story. If I can find more time, I'll read it in its entirety.

If you want honest feed back I can proffer it. I won't generally judge the concept or idea. That'd be wrong. But, there are good and bad ways to write fiction.

You need less exposition, more dialogue. The paragraphs should be broken up into shorter, single topic ones. Some "white" (ie., unused space) on the page isn't a bad thing. Let the characters talk rather than talk for them. Don't explain things, show and describe them to the reader and let the reader draw their own conclusions. Implicit is often better than explicit. Let the reader's imagination work for you rather than blandly tell them in detail what's going on.

Remember, the reader can't smell, taste, feel, what's going on. These are often forgotten senses you can add. With the topic at hand, fembots can have other senses added too and you should let the reader experience them as well.

I hope that helps.

[Esleeper]

I've been waiting for feedback on my fics for some time now. There is a link to them in my signature.

I took a quick look at your story. If I can find more time, I'll read it in its entirety.

If you want honest feed back I can proffer it. I won't generally judge the concept or idea. That'd be wrong. But, there are good and bad ways to write fiction.

You need less exposition, more dialogue. The paragraphs should be broken up into shorter, single topic ones. Some "white" (ie., unused space) on the page isn't a bad thing. Let the characters talk rather than talk for them. Don't explain things, show and describe them to the reader and let the reader draw their own conclusions. Implicit is often better than explicit. Let the reader's imagination work for you rather than blandly tell them in detail what's going on.

Remember, the reader can't smell, taste, feel, what's going on. These are often forgotten senses you can add. With the topic at hand, fembots can have other senses added too and you should let the reader experience them as well.

I hope that helps.

Pardom the late reply.

You know, you sound just like my co-writer with aome of those comments, though he's admitted to me he's no expert on "show,don't tell" either. Doesn't help that I seem to struggle to get dialog to seem "natural", rather than forced or scripted. Sometimes I feel like having more dialog might actually backfire on me as a result. As for exposition, suffice to say the community I've written for most has a world building fetish that I ended up getting myself. If there's a way to make it less intrusive, I'd like to know.

I've known that the sensory studd was an issue for a while, but I can never quite seem to fix it. Any pointers or examples I could look at?

[Murotsu]

My background is all technical and engineering. Creative writing is something I've only picked up in the last few years, mostly to keep from... Well, it's kept me here.

Anyway, at first I did lots of detail and narrative too. It took having it pointed out to me by pros how to fix that. Now I revel in eliminating stuff I included at first. I seek the most streamlined version of the scene I can create. I think carefully about each scene and what my senses (or those of the characters... my non-human characters get ones humans don't have) would be experiencing if I were there. Sights, smells, sounds. The feel of a surface.
Put yourself in your character's place. Try to think "if I were my character, what would I be experiencing in this scene?"

Also, try to storyboard some. Who is your main character? Focus on them. All the other characters are secondary. You can have more than one but remember who is important. If your story is about Thesis then focus on her. If Chares is important don't leave him out. Make sure the scenes revolve around the important characters.