Party Girls!

Gorgo · Post by **Gorgo** » Sun Mar 13, 2005 8:17 pm

Please continue this. I liked this story when its first parts were posted years ago and I'm glad you've continued it.

DollSpace · Post by **DollSpace** » Sun Mar 13, 2005 8:39 pm

I like what I read so far! ^^ Great job! The story ends rather suddenly, though...I was just wondering if that was because that's all you've written so far, or if the post was too long and it got cut off.

Anyway, great story so far!
Ryn

ehy · Post by **ehy** » Sun Mar 13, 2005 9:26 pm

Cool.

I have a feeling there's another surprise still to come....

BA · Post by BA » Mon Mar 14, 2005 5:40 am

Great story!

I loved the first part when I read it way back... it ended on an evil teaser! You've done a great job following it up, really high quality writing - must have taken you bloody ages!

You hit all the right spots for my taste. I particularly enjoyed Monica's automatic change of awareness / personality on entering the house; geeky tech babes who turn out to be hot is always a winner; attached glasses has been on my mind since I saw Flash Gordon as a kid - nicley done and, of course, lots of shut-downs and maintenance!

Well done for keeping us guessing about Dana for so long. It's become a classic genre twist so I never assume any fit bird characters are human any more. The hints were so subtle I was beginning to wonder so her uncovering was a suprise after all!

Please write more... soon!

BA

tectile · Post by **tectile** » Mon Mar 14, 2005 6:54 am

Very nice indeed!

sarabot · Post by **sarabot** » Mon Mar 14, 2005 1:28 pm

Yea, pretty good! More coming soon?

kb7rky · Post by **kb7rky** » Mon Mar 14, 2005 2:02 pm

Encouragement! Encouragement!

More! More!

Don't leave us hanging!

Um...words escape me at the moment...somebody throw me a fricken bone here!

In a nutshell...great work, Serf! I'd certainly love to see more!

Doug

ps Wow! That makes 1100 posts so far...will the streak continue? You can bet the house on it...

A.N.N. · Post by **A.N.N.** » Mon Mar 14, 2005 6:35 pm

WOW! Please continue!!!

Uncle Ray · Post by **Uncle Ray** » Mon Mar 14, 2005 10:34 pm

Like the others, I enjoyed the first part some time ago, and always wished for someone to continue the line. A wonderful job, and can't wait for the further adventures. Be kind and continue.

Korby · Post by **Korby** » Tue Mar 15, 2005 10:03 am

Big "Me Too" here. I had all but forgotten this one, though I certainly enjoyed it when it first appeared. It's great to see an old story revisited.

More, please!

Android675 · Post by **Android675** » Wed Mar 16, 2005 10:42 pm

Best story I've read in a long time. Looking forward to the next installment.

keraptis · Post by **keraptis** » Thu Mar 17, 2005 6:15 am

Finally had a chance to read this one and I have to join in on the praise. Great story, well told!

Serf, your characters are just different enough that you're able to give us a few different angles on robot behavior. Renee's complete matter-of-factness is great -- you manage to make her seem innocent and warm, not cold and lifeless. With Monica (and later Dana) we get to see robots who don't know they're robots, but when they switch to robot mode, again there's a nonchalance about the whole thing that really works well.

I'm also a huge fan of any story that really lets us see robot dialogue, particularly robots talking about being robots. The plentiful dialogue in the story is a major reason it's such a great read.

And one of my favorite moments in the whole thing was your self-referential line after Dana's true identity is revealed, an all-time classic:
Perhaps I was just getting used to this, but I wasn’t all that shocked with this new discovery.
That little wink to the reader made me laugh aloud!

All in all a fun ride that I didn't want to end! Here's hoping that we one day get to meet Dr. Karen. I'm sure she must be working on some very interesting new projects during her summer away!

kb7rky · Post by **kb7rky** » Thu Mar 17, 2005 10:07 pm

This is just begging for a smart-@$$ reply:

Party Girl - U2

I know a girl, a girl called party
Party girl
I know she wants more than a party
Party girl
And she won’t tell me her name

I know a boy, a boy called trash
Trash can
I know he does all that he can
Wham bam
And he won’t tell me his name

I have a heart, a heart that’s beating inside
When I was three I thought the world revolved around me
I was wrong
And so I sing along
And if you dance, then dance with me

I know a girl, a girl called party
Party girl
I know she wants more than a party
Party girl
I know a boy, a boy called trampoline
You know what I mean

I think you know what he wants
I think he knows what he wants
I think he knows what he wants

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Doug

serf · Post by **serf** » Sun Mar 20, 2005 12:38 am

Sorry for the delayed response, but deepest thanks to all who posted about the 'Girls'. Wow!

First things first, I have to give major props to Kishin for his support, advice, not to mention his keen eye. Without his encouragement, this story may not have continued beyond the initial installments a few years ago. Thank you, Kishin.

There is more to tell. How much? I'm not too sure. This really began as my attempt to give back to this community, and show my respect for all who had written, manipped, actively participated on the BBS, etc. Lo and behold, a larger story developed, and the characters grew more and more in my mind. So, I intend to keep it going though it may be at my standard snail's pace.

BA, there's nothing like the hot, nerd babe, especially when she's a bot. Glad you liked the specs bit, too.

Keraptis, I almost cut that line out, but I don't know...Dana's 'discovery' just seemed to warrant such a comment.

Hey, Doug(a smart alecky remark from thee? Psshaww!

), that song entered my thoughts at times during this process, I must admit.

Again, thanks to all. More to come.

kb7rky · Post by **kb7rky** » Sun Mar 20, 2005 9:55 am

serf wrote: Hey, Doug(a smart alecky remark from thee? Psshaww! ), that song entered my thoughts at times during this process, I must admit.

I know, Serf...that's hard to believe, huh?

Anyhoo...nice work. Please, scribe on!

Doug

33cl33 · Post by **33cl33** » Sun Mar 20, 2005 1:21 pm

I read this right after it was posted and forgot to reply till now - (slaps own wrist) sorry!

Excellent stuff, Serf! - just the kind of story I'm usually looking for here. Hope there's more, is the only notes I have!

liliwinnt6 · Post by **liliwinnt6** » Sun May 07, 2006 10:06 pm

Deep Blue · Post by **Deep Blue** » Tue Jan 22, 2008 9:27 am

The result was unexpected, great story! And I would like to know why and when Dana was created and what Dana did when she back to the dorm every night, if she didn't know she was a robot, how she took rest?

Bunnybot · Post by **Bunnybot** » Wed Feb 27, 2008 11:22 am

This is such an excellent piece of writing, thanks for keeping it alive. I'm also curious what can happen to the girls. The uncover of Dana is increddible, I would like to know how she would react when she realizes that she really IS a machine.

Android675 · Post by **Android675** » Thu Feb 28, 2008 8:31 am

I'll second Kishin on that. Still hoping for a final chapter to this great story!

skeetles · Post by **skeetles** » Mon Mar 31, 2008 8:34 pm

Great story so far! I'm going to echo the sentiment here and call for an ending!

Party Girls!

To Serf...

A new classic!

More Please