Temptation (comic... Kinda)

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Temptation (comic... Kinda)

Post by The Liar » Sat Jun 17, 2017 7:28 am

Not really happy with this one, the ending seems to fall flat, but I had finished it, so what the hell.

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Re: Temptation (comic... Kinda)

Post by --NightBattery-- » Sat Jun 17, 2017 1:24 pm

flat?
I think it's pretty okay.
maybe if you had let the "funny" panel for last it would have ended in a higher tone.
but hey, Mission accomplished no? one more for the out tray.
Thanks for sharing.

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