First story.

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Re: First story.

Post by FaceoffFembot » Wed Sep 28, 2016 10:08 am

Nice beginning, reminds me of my very first story :mrgreen:

A piece of advice: a climax is nothing without a good build-up. Take some time to explain what leads the fembot to malfunction and her progressive decline from tame and human-like to a horny glitchy automaton before ending with a bang. That will give her demise much more impact.

And for a title, how about Home Is Where the ERROR Is ?

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Re: First story.

Post by JohnFabar4 » Thu Sep 29, 2016 6:12 pm

After thinking about it. pixel panties works best for the first story. but "home is where the error is" works out great for my second one. thanks for the help everybody. specially you Faceoff! Hope my second story will be bigger and better!

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