The next day Chares had Thesis report for work. “Some of the scientists need data recovered from one of the station’s old computer systems. According to your technical specs you're capable of recovering these. Is that correct?”The next day, Thesis was given a new task. According to Chares, the station’s scientists needed to recover data from one of the station’s old computer systems but lacked the equipment needed to interface with the earlier technology used in them. Fortunately, Thesis was equipped with sophisticated emulation software that would allow her to recover the old files and convert them to a usable format.
“Yes, Chares, I can perform that function. Would you like the files converted to a format compatible with the station’s current computer system?”
Now the characters are interacting. You are letting the reader “see” their conversation rather than telling them second hand about it. Narrative is never preferable to DaD… Dialogue and Description. Also, you don't need to state the obvious. The reader can pick up on Chares wanting her to convert the files, or this can be added in when she does it later. That keeps the story moving. You need to be conscious of that. The story needs to move forward as continuously as possible. Digressions, and excessive wordiness only slow things down.
Thesis headed towards the location of the systems. The maintenance tunnels and abandoned compartments looked nothing like the data in her navigation system. She moved cautiously forward, trying to match the images in her system to those she was receiving from her sensors.Even with the assistance of the station’s floor and deck plans hard-coded into her memory, navigating the convoluted maze of maintenance tunnels and disused chambers was proving difficult for Thesis. Numerous parts of the area looked different from what the floor plans had designated; the possibility that it had not been updated in several cycles was not lost on the gynoid. When she returned, she would be sure to inform Command that a new floor plan would be needed.
That said, there was nothing in her memory banks about the station ever undergoing any refits…
It must have been the crews, slowly altering the interior of the station over the years in blatant violation of company regulations for reasons she could not comprehend. Of course. She’d have to inform Command about that as well.
After approximately 4.75 hours of navigating through the maintenance complex, Thesis finally came upon her objective. A bank of ancient servers loomed out of the dark before her, status lights on them glittering through the thick mist of evaporated coolant coming off them.
After four hours forty eight minutes of struggling to navigate through the warren of unauthorized compartment modifications and repeated updates of her navigation data, Thesis found her objective. The large, ancient, servers stood in rows illuminated by the few working lights that remained. Status lights blinked through a mist of coolant streaming off them. Sensor data showed the compartment uninhabitable by humans. The oxygen content was at ten percent.
You can save what Thesis would do with this problem for when she does something about it. Avoid giving the reader her thoughts unless she is the only character you do that with. Again, avoid narrative. Describe the compartments. Describe her difficulties by showing the reader what’s happening. Say she’s looking around, that visual, electronic, audio, or whatever sensor data is confusing her and how.
Try to put the reader there standing next to her viewing the scene and listening to what she says.
None of that requires you to fundamentally change what is a decent storyline. Instead, it helps the reader get into the story rather than be a spectator on the sidelines.
I hope that helps.