Working on new visual novel.

[T-elos/Thurosis]

I gave up trying to get this Novel running,
not even my friend who is an expert in computer could get it running on my PC....
While it seems to be running perfectly on his computer....
Darn it, i really want to know what went wrong...

[darkbutflashy]

@The Liar: my thoughts about the text:

• Get rid of the omniscient narrator whenever possible. The shower scene at the start in lenghty, but it would work if these were Aya's thoughts reported by her. From the omniscient viewpoint, you are giving away the chance to let the player get in touch with the main character.
• This preface without interactions is far too long. You should add some choices at the first scene involving another person, they don't need to have an impact on the story, maybe releasing only an easter-egg or give a hint.

[darkbutflashy]

@The Liar: about the graphics

• The streets, corridoors are all empty. Put some background figures there, apparitional cars, or light stripes as from a time exposure photo.

The game seems to fault when I switch desktops, so I savegame very often. What I found, after loading a savegame, Aya's name in the text display is replaced by "DR-650...". This is a bug.

[The Liar]

@The Liar: my thoughts about the text:

• Get rid of the omniscient narrator whenever possible. The shower scene at the start in lenghty, but it would work if these were Aya's thoughts reported by her. From the omniscient viewpoint, you are giving away the chance to let the player get in touch with the main character.
• This preface without interactions is far too long. You should add some choices at the first scene involving another person, they don't need to have an impact on the story, maybe releasing only an easter-egg or give a hint.

@The Liar: about the graphics

• The streets, corridoors are all empty. Put some background figures there, apparitional cars, or light stripes as from a time exposure photo.

The game seems to fault when I switch desktops, so I savegame very often. What I found, after loading a savegame, Aya's name in the text display is replaced by "DR-650...". This is a bug.

@The Liar: my thoughts about the game style:

• You should increase the text speed for normal speech. So that robotic speech can be denoted by slow speed in addition to a different font. (But I think it's too slow anyway, we are all nerdy caffeine-junkies, right?)
• I think the font for persons who are not robots or not uncovered as robots yet should be rounded for the same reason. Maybe even for Aya when she's acting non-robotic?
• When there are two persons, the text box should not only change the name but also be mirrored, according to whether the left or the right person is speaking. Different colors would be nice, too.

I like the text and graphics so far. Haven't got time to get through until the current end of your efforts, though.

I appreciate the feed back, though I'm not sure how doable many of your suggestions are. I'm using the Novelty system and those font and dialog changes will be complicated, if not impossible with the system (this is time consuming as it is, though I'll look into it.)(You do know you don't have to wait for the dialog? Just click your mouse the the whole box will be filled.).

The color change I can do, but every time I try it looks off, which is why I went with the flat white for all this time.

The omniscient narrator is only in the prologue, it's there to emphasize her lack of agency at this point.

I'll try looking into that bug, though that might just be a glitch caused by you using Wine.
edit: that does seem to be an issue. I think I need to rename the actors at the start of every scene.
Edit 2: the fix was easier than that, I just need to rename them in the cast manger, the rename command seems to work under the assumption that it's only temporary.

I should state that my principle objective with this project is to have a finished, competent product, instead of running the red queens race to perfection which dragged down a lot of my other projects.

[darkbutflashy]

I appreciate the feed back, though I'm not sure how doable many of your suggestions are. I'm using the Novelty system and those font and dialog changes will be complicated, if not impossible with the system (this is time consuming as it is, though I'll look into it.)

Hey, you've done some excellent artwork with the robot parts of the girls, have a good story idea and now you chicken out at some minor technical difficulties?

You do know you don't have to wait for the dialog? Just click your mouse the the whole box will be filled.

Yes, I found out within seconds. I've clicked more than the whole day. It's tedious. I don't get why anyone would like to have this teletype effect. This isn't a teletype. This isn't karaoke.

The color change I can do, but every time I try it looks off, which is why I went with the flat white for all this time.

Pastel colors of white look fairly good. Or adjust the text box itself.

The omniscient narrator is only in the prologue, it's there to emphasize her lack of agency at this point.

I understand. But it tells things that are usually a good kept secret to anyone and reading it from the omniscient narrator feels to me this is meant to be public information found on a bulletin board.

I should state that my principle objective with this project is to have a finished, competent product, instead of running the red queens race to perfection which dragged down a lot of my other projects.

Well, okay. Sorry.

[GATASAPA]

Do you have other games? I foud some your posts but links all died.

[--NightBattery--]

Aye, page not found it said.

[The Liar]

Do you have other games? I foud some your posts but links all died.

They only stay for a month since their last download.

I had started several that failed for some reason or another. I had uploaded the start of them, but they were all lost when my computer died.

Maybe the other member's still have them?

[T-elos/Thurosis]

Finnally i got it running...

and in the end it was only a simple thing....
my anti-virus blocked the ectraction....

now i played it. and my feedback comes now

The story is quite interesting and i really love that I.F. Programm also
the overwriting scene.
The only draw back was only the text speed.

I look forward to more ^^
(and hope for a at least for a bit for mekabare) XD